What do you think of the obituary that I wrote for my mother?

My mother just passed away at the age of 83, so she had a nice, long happy life. I want to say that the names I'll be using for her family members are fake, and I will replace them with the real ones in the actual obituary. So here it is:

Margaret Goldman was called home on Sunday, May 28th, 2017 at the age of 83. She was proceeded in death by her husband, Keith Goldman, as well as her youngest grandchild and only grandson, Isaac Bernstein. She is survived by her survived by her five daughters, who are Charlotte Finch, Diane Anderson, Marie Goldman, Helen Bernstein, and Janet Goldman, as well as her sons-in-law, who are Peter Finch, Paul Anderson, and Andrew Bernstein. She is also survived by her seven granddaughters, who are Natalie Finch, Hannah Finch, Clara Anderson, Chloe Anderson, Emma Anderson, Rachel Bernstein, and Leah Bernstein. Visitation will by on Tuesday, June 6th.