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Thu 15 Dec, 2016 08:06 am
With a happy (and slightly tired) heart, everyone journeyed back to church to conclude the two-day one-night Children’s camp.
1. Do native speakers write "With a happy (and slightly tired) heart"? If not, how should it be recast? I would write Happy and slightly tired.
2. Is it correct to write to conclude the two-day one-night Children’s camp.? I find it not quite right because the camp couldn't have concluded by going back to the church. Am I right?
Thanks.
With a happy (and slightly tired) heart, everyone journeyed back to church to conclude the two-day one-night Children’s camp.
How about:
Exhausted, but with happy hearts, everyone journeyed back to church to conclude the camping experience.
(Unless it is absolutely necessary that people know this was a "2-day, overnight camp experience."
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