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The girl, today appears in a New York street, looking refreshing and spell able, in her sapphire blue dress and a pair of white leisure shoes, smiling lovingly.

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[+3] - Tes yeux noirs - 12/10/2015She is wearing white trainers. Smiling "lovingly"? She is just smiling.

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1. Lose the first comma
2. "Spell able" does not mean anything.

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She is wearing white trainers.
Smiling "lovingly"? She is just smiling.

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@Tes yeux noirs,

Tes yeux noirs wrote:

1. Lose the first comma
2. "Spell able" does not mean anything.

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Office worker should prepare a sense of this kind of style to reach recreational the trousers that savours a beautiful, those who let you show duty field woman at any time is spell able with handsome.

Now I see how notoriously bad these writings are.

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@oristarA,

in North America, the shoes would likely be called high tops

leisure shoes doesn't have a positive connotation

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what she is wearing doesn't look like a dress - maybe a two piece or suit?

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what are you trying to suggest when you say she looks refreshing?

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first comma has to go

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smiling lovingly? that doesn't make sense in the context of the photo

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you've already discovered that spell able doesn't mean anything in English

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on a New York street is better than in

in the street suggests she's been run over by a car

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and - not connected to the writing - that outfit she's wearing looks very badly made and doesn't seem to fit her any better than the high tops do

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@ehBeth,

Good comment, EB.
Would you like to depict it with your own words?

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@oristarA,

A young woman recently seen on a New York street, happy and fresh-faced, but looking awkward in her poorly made blue outfit and white high tops.

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@ehBeth,

ehBeth wrote:

A young woman recently seen on a New York street, happy and fresh-faced, but looking awkward in her poorly made blue outfit and white high tops.

Cool.
I like the expression "fresh-faced."

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