In many big cities in the world, the quality of life is decreasing. What are the causes and solution

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In many big cities in the world, the quality of life is decreasing. What are the causes and solutions for this?
A decline in quality of life of individual citizens is becoming one of the most important problems that governments are much concerned about. The aim of this essay is to investigate factors responsible for this issue and put forward a number of solutions to resolve this situation.
The reasons behind the decrease in the quality of life are numerous. The deterioration of environment seems to be the first reason of this issue. It is true that the boom of population and globalization makes environment suffer from so much industrial waste and household waste. This causes in the air and river pollution in big cities; therefore, affect people's health. Another worth-mentioning reason contributing to the reduction of the quality of life in mega-cities is the explosion of population. It is the pressure of overpopulation increase that makes job competition in labour market become fiercer and scarcer; thus, only qualified job hunters can be employed. Consequently, the unemployment rate increases and the salary is meager, making individuals live on a tight budget.
A number of measures can be taken in order to mitigate the problem of living standard deterioration in today's society. Firstly, governments should come up with more policies to enhance waste collection systems and incorporate with public media to encourage citizens to reduce littering and contaminating. Only by doing this, can pollution be declined and public awareness of environment enhanced. Secondly, governments should heavily subsidize every economic sector to create more job opportunities. Having more job opportunities offers will the reduce employment ratio, this is an embodiment of a society with a higher level of living standard.
In conclusion, There are various factors leading to the deterioration of the quality of life have been figured out; however, this is no mean that we surrender this phenomenon because many measures can be taken to tackle this.
Can you please score my essay?

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[+3] - FBM - 12/05/2015I can't give you an actual score, but here's a link to the rubrics for the IELTS writing section, in case you don't already have them:...

@thiet sun,

I am interested in cities, but not in blocks of text.

I gather this is a homework assignment. Cities differ, perhaps a new concept to you or your instructor.

Do you have a textbook nearby?

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@thiet sun,

I can't give you an actual score, but here's a link to the rubrics for the IELTS writing section, in case you don't already have them: http://www.examenglish.com/IELTS/IELTS_Writing_MarkSchemes.html

I will edit your essay and highlight any changes below:

thiet sun wrote:

In many big cities in the world, the quality of life is decreasing. What are the causes and solutions for this?
A decline in individual quality of life is becoming one of the most important problems that governments are much concerned about. The aim of this essay is to investigate factors responsible for this issue and put forward a number of solutions to resolve this situation.
The reasons behind the decrease in the quality of life are numerous. The deterioration of the environment seems to be the first reason for this problem. It is true that the population boom and globalization make the environment suffer from excessive industrial and household waste. This causes air and river pollution in big cities; therefore, it affects people's health. The other reason worth mentioning that is contributing to the reduction of the quality of life in mega-cities is the populationexplosion. It is the pressure of overpopulation that makes job competition in labour markets become fiercer; thus, only qualified job hunters can be employed. Consequently, the unemployment rate is increasing and salaries are meager, making individuals live on a tight budget.
A number of measures can be taken in order to mitigate the problem of living standard deterioration in today's society. Firstly, governments should come up with more policies to enhance waste collection systems and cooporate with public media to encourage citizens to reduce littering and contamination. Only by doing this can pollution be reduced and public awareness of the environment enhanced. Secondly, governments should heavily subsidize every economic sector to create more job opportunities. Having more job opportunities will reduce the employment ratio. This is an embodiment of a society with a higher standard of living.
In conclusion, there are various factors leading to the deterioration of the quality of life; however, this does not mean that we should surrender to this phenomenon, because many measures can be taken to tackle it.
Can you please score my essay?

Feel free to ask me to explain any of the changes I made. I might have made a mistake or two.

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@FBM,

I see I was confused, not understanding about IELTS and writing.

Good work, FBM. Some spaces missing, but never mind. Wink

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@ossobuco,

Yeah, I get sloppy with the bold tags sometimes. I could proofread a little more carefully, since that's what I try to teach my students to do. Laughing

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@FBM,

I always listen to you. If you goof once in a while that makes you not an automaton, which is better.

Meantime, I had missed the whole subject, aak.

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@thiet sun,

Yes, I do agree that in some big cities the quality of life is decreasing. When I refer to quality of life, I am coming at it from a different angle. Yes good paying jobs, lower unemployment rate, and pollution free environment are very important to quality of life. I would ask the question in a different manner. I would ask: What things would make you want to live in any particular big city? I would want to live in a big city that doesn't have a whole lot of heavy traffic congestion on the streets and highways. I would want to live in a big city where I don't have to drive far to get away from the city to enjoy nature such as beaches, mountains , lakes , rivers, waterfalls, animal life, forestry, caverns, birds, flowers, etc. I would also want to live in a big city that offers a large variety of affordable inexpensive restaurants. I would want to live in a big city that offers an assortment of free or inexpensive live entertainment in small intimate settings. I would want to live in a big city that I can find something to do 24 hours a day. I would want to live in a big city that has a low crime rate. I would want to live in a big city where I can get inexpensive quality medical care. I would want to live in a city where I could get inexpensive quality schooling. I would want to live in big city that is spacious, clean, open, and beautiful. Those are some of the things I would be looking for when it comes to quality of life.

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