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Wed 29 Apr, 2015 04:34 pm
I don’t mean to be so clingy
It just comes out when I’m about to fail
I just ask for two simple things
It’s ridiculous that when I ask you that
You act like I’m asking for gold
All I wanted was a home with you
For us to spend time together
Bond and get close
For you to see me shine as the real me
And maybe, just maybe I was hoping to get just one last chance
Why do you make me feel like I’m not good enough?
We are a compatible match, we really are, more than you know
I told you I wouldn’t force it and I stick to my guns
But for now I have tricks of my own
Because I’ve got magick on my side
There’s no quitting in this scenario
There never will be
Please forgive and trust me again
Please don’t ever abandon me no matter how stormy our friendship gets
I’m not as evil as I seem
I’m still secretly fighting for you
There’s no resting until I have my reward
@alyssapaganproblem,
Why not seek reviews on a website that is strictly for writers. Sites like Wattpad will yield you more reviews.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wattpad
Wishing you good luck.
@alyssapaganproblem,
sorry you struck out. that seems to be a repeating pattern for your efforts.
My thought and advice to you is that this all seems to be a personal battle you're dealing with - perhaps an obsession for you. Have you tried enrolling in a writing course? That would also allow your writing to be critiqued.
@Ragman,
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