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Reply Thu 13 Dec, 2018 08:31 am
I was wondering if I could get an analysis of the following poem:

A light seen suddenly in the storm, snow
Coming from all sides, like flakes
Of-sleep, and myself
On the road to the dark barn
Halfway there, a black dog near me

Light on the wooden rail,
Someone I knew and loved.
As we hear the dates of his marriage
And the years he moved
A wreath of dark fir and shiny laurel
Slips off the coffin

A cathedral: I see
Starving men, weakened, leaning
On their knees. But the bells ring anyway.
Sending out over the planted fields
A vegetation, sound waves with long leaves

There is a wound on the trunk,
Where the branch was torn off

A wing comes out of it,
Rising, swelling
Swirling over everything alive

thank you!
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fresco
 
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Reply Thu 13 Dec, 2018 12:37 pm
@k-arinasen,
Sorry But for me a stream consciousness like this is not 'poetry'

....you're welcome!
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Ponderer
 
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Reply Thu 13 Dec, 2018 06:48 pm
@k-arinasen,
Visual, physically softly sensory, personal, emotionally revealing,, suddenly sad with finality, heart-numbingly ............................comparative, yet ending with spirited hope.
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Ponderer
 
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Reply Fri 14 Dec, 2018 07:23 am
@Downthumb
I thought "softly sensory" and "suddenly sad" was pretty poetic.
fresco
 
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Reply Fri 14 Dec, 2018 09:25 am
@Ponderer,
Who is 'Downthumb' ?
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PUNKEY
 
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Reply Fri 14 Dec, 2018 01:40 pm
I liked your poem and it’s a nice tribute to someone who obviously meant something to you - father or grandfather?
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fresco
 
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2018 02:21 am
Could somebody explain to me why the reporting of a stream of ideas, without any rhythmic or metaphorical nuance, divided by seemingly arbitrary spacings, constitutes 'poetry' ?
There is nothing 'wrong' with the cliche'd ideas expressed, but I I suggest to call it 'poetry' is a bit of an insult to the labour of poets who might sweat over every word they choose.

Ponderer
 
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2018 01:26 pm
@fresco,
Because it is written from a broken heart.
fresco
 
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2018 02:19 pm
@Ponderer,
Debatable as a conclusion.
Nonsensical as a definition.

IMO, 'poetry' involves the crafting of semantic, graphemic and rhythmic aspects of language into a piece which transcends the mere reporting of ideas, or the expressing of emotion, the very vocalization of which gives pleasure to the reader.

Ponderer
 
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2018 04:56 pm
@fresco,
Everwhat
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laughoutlood
 
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Reply Sat 15 Dec, 2018 08:16 pm
T'was once in debate so zoetic
And bursting with concepts noetic
That I couldn't quibble
Without foam and dribble
That what I had wrote was very it
fresco
 
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Reply Sun 16 Dec, 2018 01:26 am
@laughoutlood,
Smile Nice one despite scanning problem with last line!
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fresco
 
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Reply Sun 16 Dec, 2018 01:57 am
@laughoutlood,
How about...

And picking the words was the trick.
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PUNKEY
 
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Reply Sun 16 Dec, 2018 04:58 pm
It was always very prophetic.
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