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An alternative word for 'which'???

 
 
Reply Thu 16 Aug, 2018 04:21 pm
I'm struggling to get a sentence correct and would very much appreciate some help, please. I have 'which' twice in this sentence and don't like it but I can't think of an alternative word.

"This includes emailing both annual reminders and member's updates (which we hope you have found enjoyable) which obviously saves us money on postage."

Perhaps the structure should be changed slightly, do you think?

Thanks, I would really appreciate any help / advice on this
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InfraBlue
 
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Reply Thu 16 Aug, 2018 04:31 pm
@PigeonEnglish,
What's the context of the sentence? The emailing of both annual reminders and member's updates are included in what?
PigeonEnglish
 
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Reply Thu 16 Aug, 2018 04:37 pm
@InfraBlue,
Hi

Re a particular animal charity, I'm constructing a letter to accompany a consent form as, since GDPR, we are not to email members until we have 'explicit' consent to email members

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" [Charity] have told us that we must have ‘explicit consent’ before sending emails to any Member. This includes emailing both annual Membership Reminders and Member’s Updates (which we hope you have found these enjoyable) which obviously saves us money on postage."

Thanks
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jespah
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 06:25 am
@PigeonEnglish,
[Charity] have told us that we must have ‘explicit consent’ before sending emails to any Member. This includes emailing both annual Membership Reminders and Member’s Updates (which we hope you have found these enjoyable). This obviously saves us money on postage.
PigeonEnglish
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 11:41 am
@jespah,
Many thanks jespah
So simple so why couldn't I think of that? Wink Looking at it too long and being tired, eh?
Can print this now ... Wink
I very much appreciate your help.
ehBeth
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 11:51 am
@PigeonEnglish,
stop !!!

PigeonEnglish wrote:
This includes emailing both annual Membership Reminders and Member’s Updates (which we hope you have found these enjoyable) which obviously saves us money on postage."



which we hope you have found these enjoyable

drop the which from this as well

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we hope you have found these enjoyable


ehBeth
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 11:52 am
@PigeonEnglish,
PigeonEnglish wrote:
Looking at it too long and being tired, eh?


seems like you got tired of editing and re-editing

happens to everyone Smile
PigeonEnglish
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 03:51 pm
@ehBeth,
Exactly Wink
Ended up not being able to see the wood for the trees LOL
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PigeonEnglish
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 03:52 pm
@ehBeth,
Oops!!! Well spotted Wink
Mny thanks
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jespah
 
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Reply Fri 17 Aug, 2018 05:23 pm
@ehBeth,
Oops, I should've noticed that one.

A good group effort! Smile
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PigeonEnglish
 
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Reply Sat 18 Aug, 2018 02:56 pm
Thanks to all of you, for your help
Just brilliant Smile
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