How are my song lyrics?

Problem with just writing lyrics is, they are a dime a dozen, unless you know music or someone who can help you do something with them. The plainest lyrics can seem quite beautiful, if given the right sound. Without that, the lyrics can be great or plain, but no one will heed them.

This is gonna be worth only .02c. You need some words they rhymes with fine.

Your lyrics are well thought out and heartfelt. There was something about the lyrics that seems like it didn't flow quite right. I am referring to the rhythm and rhyme structure. I hope you don't mind. I essentially kept most of the lyrics the same and rearrange them to give it a different flow. Again, your lyrics are well thought out and has a heartfelt message.


I didn't think it was a sin to cry
About your feelings and how it hurts sometimes
I know that it's a sin to lie
I'm okay, I'll be just fine

I will make it through the night
Yeah there was another fight
But it's okay it's alright
I will make it through the night

So I lock my feelings down in a cage
I always think that things will change
But they always come up with an outrage
I always think that things will change

You will make it through the night
Yeah there was another fight
But it's okay it's alright
You will make it through the night

I don't think with my brain but instead my heart
And I know that can tear people apart
But the love that we share is a work of art
So I won't think with my brain but instead my heart

We will make it through the night
Yeah there was another fight
But it's okay it's alright
We will make it through the night