How the story should have been told

This is something I submitted to my college mag - just wanted some feedback before publication

Drunk and desperate
Versus lonely and unloved
A dangerous combination
In the dark our fingers entwined
Holding on like we were afraid
Of what?
To let go?
To be alone?
You told me you were scared
I was, but offered reassurance
Warm
Comforting
Inevitable?
I think not somehow
We held each other and pretended that made it better
I thought of him
You thought of her
We both knew, but did not speak their names
Too much pain
You fell asleep in my arms
Silent at last

By Bekaboo
15/02/06