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Mind Game

 
 
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Reply Wed 24 Aug, 2005 12:18 pm
Mind the enemy
fighting against me

Rush of blood
Like a hammers thud

Eyes switch sides
Light now blinds

Sweet sounds
Drive the hammer home

Seeking Darkness
Away from it all

relief hoping to find
But elusive as time

Blood rush
Day fades away

The pain stays

Welcome to what a migraine is like
 
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Reply Thu 25 Aug, 2005 09:15 am
interesting
What an interesting poem. I like the repetative blood rush line, it really helps to keep a rhythm.
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Reply Thu 25 Aug, 2005 11:32 pm
I like how the imagery is never the same each time you read it, the reference to something simple like a migrane makes you take a step back and look at it again, differently each time
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Reply Thu 25 Aug, 2005 11:41 pm
Yeah, I like how it turned out to be about a migraine...awesome...
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Reply Fri 26 Aug, 2005 12:22 am
Thanks for the comments nice to see what others think
This was the best i could do at tellin what it feels like
tho its more like your heads goin to bust open then
a hammer thud
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