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Reply Tue 10 May, 2005 12:18 pm
The truth was that the prophecy was very truthful. The disagreement was

for the meant person, and for how long my secret would be safe?!

What an impasse?!

9) You are one of us !

And why is the house number five exactly?!

I put my dear nitroglycerin under my tongue. I waited until the headache

and giddiness started. then I spat it out.

You know my heart condition Reem. It had the same weakness as now. It

was never just healthy as I remember.

Nobody noticed what I'd done, and the major said friendly,

-" You are one of us Mida even if you didn't know that".

The husband said while going back to the couch,

-" Your coming here wasn't by chance. It was a mystic call that your ears

have never heard of it before. It's like the one that ushers the migratory

birds to their destination, or like the one that makes a compass's needle

moves. For similar reasons the old lady accepted you here despite that she

refused many of us. You were the first to answer the call. It was an irony

that you forgot you were one of us ".

Sandra said fondly,

- "But, he will remember with his staying with us ".
 
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Reply Sat 14 May, 2005 06:08 pm
I've read this one several times and am unable to completely follow the images. I get the impression of a visitor - from where? Good? Evil? I'm sorry, but my thinking is very superficial. I just didn't want to see this one slide off the page without having a good look from the others. It certainly has a hook. I just don't get it.
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