"I fear the chance that my descent (profitable though it's been thus far) into the strange world of online poker will be seen by society at large as some kind of mistake.
Or: "I fear the chance that my descent into the strange world of online poker (profitable though it's been thus far) will be seen by society at large as some kind of mistake."
I wouldn't want anyone to be confused about what the subject is in this sentence. Thank you.
Second version best.
Its not the "descent" per se that was "profitable", but the "descent into the world of poker"
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Ragman
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Tue 3 Mar, 2015 10:29 am
@ZachBoyer,
I'd put the parenthetical phrase after the word poker. Doesn't it make more sense to you to go there? After all, it modifies that phrase.
It does not mo0dify the word descent.
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selectmytutor
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Tue 28 Apr, 2015 12:59 am
@ZachBoyer,
Hi ZachBoyer,
Second version of Sentence is correct.
"I fear the chance that my descent into the strange world of online poker (profitable though it's been thus far) will be seen by society at large as some kind of mistake."
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