Paragraph correction

Yes, I can definitely confirm that it is a paragraph.

100 I don't think you'll achieve much response since most of us suppose you want us to rewrite your homework assignment. You might have better luck asking for comment of a more general sort, at the same time making it much clearer what you expect. However

"Priceless" by Stephanie Meyer, a wonderful urban fantasy, commences with the heroine (an ambitious lady lawyer named Freezie Comaparts trying to establish a new practice, etc) taking a missing child case but soon encountering totally unforeseen problems with the law. The characters are excellent. Usually (in Meyers' novels) (in stories of this sort) for instance I find the hero a bit of a disappointment--but not here. Meyer's protagonist is funny, tough, smart, caring, but a spoiler.

One of my favorite scenes has an FBI agent hounding her for her performance in another matter when he finally gets fed up with his tirade and gives him a big kiss as a token of goodbye. Her dialogue followiong this incident is especially funny.

There were many such rollicking scenes. It was another of those gotcha moments picturing their faces as she returned to her vehicle. Characters are believable with a fast pace, good plot, excellent dialogues, and a few surprises to boot.

Thank you, dalehileman. You're right I didn't explain what I wanted. This is a review for Amazon.com. I just wanted to know if my grammar is correct. I do like your words much better, but I only wanted to know if I made any mistakes with my grammar. Thank you for the help!

Aha 100 if just rudiment grammar, punct, etc then

"Priceless" by Stephanie Meyer…… Meyer's main character……., caring, etc., a spoiler…… tirade(,) and (comma optional)…...one of those gotcha moments…...haven’t read it(,) yet (I wouldn't have used this one)…….has a fast pace, good plot, excellent dialogues(,) and surprises (unless surprises also excellent)

Thank you again. I have a question to ask. The comma between dialogues (,) and surprises. Do you mean a comma goes in between the two words even with and in the middle? Or should I take the "and" out.

There are two schools of thought. In mine, yes because without it "excellent" could modify "surprises"

That would be okay too but then of course you'd absolutely still need the comma

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